In our class we have started reading the novel, Crabbe, by William Bell. The main character, Franklin Crabbe experiences many interesting and varied situations which he describes with great detail in his "Journals."
Our class is going to use Crabbe's Journals as inspiration for this multimedia based assignment. You all have your own pages in this folder and this is where you are going to write your response to Crabbe.
I would also like to see you take the time to give positive feedback on responses to other students in the class as well as ask for help from the students if you need it.
Every week we are going to have computer time and in this time, I would like to see you responding to something from Crabbe's Journals.
In your response, you may choose to write as if you were talking to Crabbe about his experience and offer him some advice for his situation.
OR You may write as if you are criticizing Crabbe's behaviour and tell him to get his act together.
You may also include a picture or video if it helps explain your ideas.
Here is Ms. Weir's response to Crabbe's first Journal entry. (Please use this as an example of what you are to do for this task.)
Dear Crabbe,
I wanted to write to you and tell you that I am concerned with your "vice." I think smoking is very bad for your health and that you are using it as a means of avoiding reality. Your reality seems to be that something upsetting has happened and you are having issues dealing with your problems. I just wanted to let you know that smoking is not the way to handle a situation. There are many other healthy means of dealing with an issue such as talking to someone, taking up a sport, or concentrating on making yourself a better person rather than doing something harmful to your body. Please do listen to my advice as I have seen some of my good friends lose a parent to lung cancer and it really is an awful experience when you see someone pass away from something that is preventable.
I hope you consider my suggestions and if not, at least take a look at this video to help change your mind.
Comments (5)
msjweir said
at 10:43 am on Nov 18, 2009
Use the following comments as examples of good feedback on writing.
msjweir said
at 10:41 am on Nov 18, 2009
You could be a bit more mean in your writing because the video is funny. It would get your message across better.
msjweir said
at 10:41 am on Nov 18, 2009
You use very good descriptive words. You also had your facts straight and used them correctly.
msjweir said
at 10:40 am on Nov 18, 2009
You should ask Crabbe some questions to get him thinking.
msjweir said
at 10:40 am on Nov 18, 2009
The last sentence is a run-on sentence. It is too long. Perhaps try to shorten into a couple different sentences or make it less "wordy."
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